More on Feedback
Anyway, let’s get back to what I got from Sudowrite’s Feedback feature, because it points out a frequent lie told by AI detractors that I don’t even think they know is a lie. It’s the fallacy of the ego stroke.
I remember a few years back, when I started getting pretty deep into this AI thing, a professional acquaintance of mine saying, “All AI does is tell you what you want to hear.” Well, that wasn’t true then, and it’s not true now. A model will do its best not to crush you with its responses, but if it’s well-tuned — like Claude, or the model behind Sudowrite’s Feedback — it’ll only couch valid criticism in softer language, not hide it.
Take this about Little Aliens:
You have crafted a deeply moving, slice-of-life romance that perfectly captures the isolation and stark beauty of the American Southwest. Hayley’s narrative voice is authentic, and her dual relationships—the complicated history with Rosa and the quiet, profound connection with Alan—anchor the story beautifully. To elevate this manuscript to the next level, focus on tightening the pacing in the first act. Right now, the story takes its time touring Lancelot before the core conflicts begin. Additionally, look for ways to make Hayley a more active protagonist; she often waits for the plot (William’s job offer, Rosa’s confession, Alan’s invitations) to happen to her.
See how it works? Good stuff first, followed by the criticism. Like a solid critique should do.
We’ll discuss this more soon.